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2022

Merry Crisis

On the 7^th night of Hanukkah my vindictive author gave to me....

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if i were (same but different)
https://archiveofourown.org/collections/yuletide2022/works/43680273
"Mysterious fog nothing to worry about" says weatherman who died 20 years ago (Short Story), gen, 2k

The Long and Short of It
https://archiveofourown.org/collections/yuletide2022/works/43264410
Sakeru Gum "Long Long Man" (Commercials), M/M, 1.1k

Stay In Touch
https://archiveofourown.org/collections/yuletide2022/works/43827871
Fandom For Robots (Short Story), gen, 1k

Underwater Court
https://archiveofourown.org/collections/yuletide2022/works/43611628
Contessa with Squid (Painting), gen, 1.3k

"Mysterious fog nothing to worry about" - This was okay, but I felt like the reveal had basically nothing to do with the rest of the story. Like, it'd be a fantastic reveal for some other story.

"Long Long Man" - This was too silly for me. I couldn't finish it. I'm pretty sure there are ways to write a story I'd enjoy that includes the fundamental absurdity of the commercials, but this didn't.

Fandom for Robots - Very cute! This was my favorite of the bunch.

Contessa with Squid - The writing here felt really heavy, and like all the sentences were long for the purpose of being long. It was also mostly summary, with very little description of things actually happening in the moment, which also made it hard going. You can write a story of this length and get across most or all of the worldbuilding with much less direct exposition than this, or mixed in with a lot more action and dialogue. And the final line just makes the whole story feel limp, because it makes it feel like the story never had any stakes.

1. Does the social media aspect really well, and the horror stuff was solid. Not sure the tone of the messages from Milo quite worked for me, but that's incredibly nitpicky. Overall my favourite of the three I read.

2. Feels like it captures the tone of the commercials pretty well! But that's not a tone that works for me particularly in a fic so I kind of bounced off it. I wouldn't say that's the fic's fault; just not for me.

3. Cute! Felt very much in line with the short story, which I looked up before I read it, but TBH the original story didn't do that much for me either, so that's about all I have to say.

4. Lots of dense paragraphs of detailed worldbuilding, not much actually happening. I am really not the audience for this because that's the opposite of my preferences, so it's hard for me to judge it fairly. The "wonderous" typo in the first line is a bit unfortunate since it seems to be a one-off error.

I'd say my overall impression is that all of them seem well-aimed at the sort of thing people looking at fic for these canons probably want, it just happens that that's mostly not what I personally look for in a story.

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* Ignore that "of the three I read", I originally skipped the Long Long Man one because I didn't think I'd be into it, but then decided I might as well read it anyway for the sake of completeness.

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