Merry Crisis

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On the 7^th night of Hanukkah my vindictive author gave to me....

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[(Anonymous)]

+1. Maybe also make it explicit that now that he has a dragon he can't be expelled from the weyr even if he's outed, and that as a bronze rider he's way less likely to be forced into sex.

I can see how not making it through your original plan made the ending a bit unclear but it's fixable with minor edits.

[(Anonymous)]

Do you see how this is only a problem if you're canon blind, which their recip probably isn't?

[(Anonymous)]

ayrt Dunno, I feel like it's a weakness in the story either way, because MC doesn't really get a chance to react to what happened beyond "yay, dragon!" so the tension that was setup earlier isn't fully resolved. Yeah, part of the advantages of fanfic is that you *can* rely on canon knowledge for some of that but it's still a better story if you don't.

Like someone who deeply understands Weyrs is hopefully not going to go the route of the angry person on _coal, but as both the coalie who was infodumping about bronze dragon sexual politics upthread *and* a coalie who has a huge amount of practice at "oh fuck, I am not going to be able to take this bus pass nearly as far as I planned", giving MC even a couple lines to be relieved about the blackmail being irrelevant now would have made it a better story. If you'd made it longer it would have been a *plot point* so you could have waited, but it wasn't, so don't. I don't think the story is transphobic garbage or anything, but I can still see the not-fully-papered-over cracks of it being a fraction of something that was supposed to be bigger, and giving that a more explicit resolution would have helped a lot.

Also recip admitted to not having canon-reviewed lately in their signup. And since it's a nostalgia fandom on yuletide, you gotta assume there will be collection browsers who haven't re-read in twenty years, too. So it will still be a good idea to make things like that explicit for people who aren't fully canon-blind but still mostly only remember the broad outlines.

(I mean I probably wouldn't have been as sure of all that myself if I hadn't written Weyr politics to somebody's prompt a few years back and done a really intense review of all that.)

[(Anonymous)]

Oh, this is such useful feedback about story structure and especially in Yuletide in general. I haven't taken part in this discussion because I don't know the fandom, but I appreciate this <3 Thanks coalie!