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Re: Early Rejects

[(Anonymous)]

Ready to finally end the redhead, Van pulled out his gun and pointed it at him. So what if he messed up the dining table in the process, he could simply reimburse Saint the cost. Whatever price it was would be more than worth making this idiot finally shut up.

Fortunately for Impey, Cardia stepped up and placed her gloved hand on Van's arm and started to lower his hand. "Now now… let's calm down… please?" She pleaded as she looked into Van's eyes with a faintly nervous smile.

Albeit reluctant, Van put away his gun at Cardia's request, however he continued to glare at Impey.

"He's whipped…" Lupin mumbled as he watched the scene from his seat, though his quietly spoken words did not go unheard by Van, who redirected his attention towards the thief.



The writing could be improved, but it feels well-meaning to me? Lots of epithets, lots of circling around the same exaggerated drama, and many punctuation mistakes, but if that's all that's wrong with it, rejecting seems like an overreaction. It's cute.