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Re: 3T1L: Zero Comments Edition

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Front Cover - The writing wasn't too bad, but I was not into the romance at all. I think Ning's pushiness was supposed to be cute and endearing, but I found it super obnoxious and just wanted Ryan to be able to get away from him. I assume this is an element of canon, though, and not the author's fault.

The Strange Case of Mr Hyde - I liked this one! The mystery was creepy and the dynamic between the two leads was messy and interesting. My main complaint was that it felt like it needed about 25% more words, because I wanted to see the resolution of the mystery, and also the jump from mystery-solving to kissing seemed very abrupt.

Four More Years - Ugh, first person. I mostly skimmed once I realized there wasn't going to be anything else besides the porn, which was too bad, because I liked the bits at the beginning best, where Martin is reflecting on the kind of person/politician David is. In terms of feedback, I'd say the rhythm of this feels monotonous, like it's 2-3 sentences and a paragraph break, repeat, repeat. I also feel like more complex sentences would help - more dependent clauses, that kind of thing.

Oasis - More first person. I already don't like that POV, but I really can't handle it for RPF. Also based on what I know about the Gallaghers, this seems kind of overly fluffy, characterization-wise. "You always make me happy"? Some of the individual scenes were nice, though.